Comments on: Myth Re-appropriation into poem http://simone11.wordpress.com/2008/04/27/myth-re-appropriation-into-poem/ Sun, 18 May 2008 03:35:58 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 By: bgblogging http://simone11.wordpress.com/2008/04/27/myth-re-appropriation-into-poem/#comment-68 bgblogging Tue, 06 May 2008 00:25:42 +0000 http://simone11.wordpress.com/?p=75#comment-68 I like this one, too, for the reasons Katie points out, but I wonder if it should be longer, even more stretched out and weighty so that the irony of his hubris, and the absurdity of his condition will contribute their own layers. I like this one, too, for the reasons Katie points out, but I wonder if it should be longer, even more stretched out and weighty so that the irony of his hubris, and the absurdity of his condition will contribute their own layers.

]]> By: kflagg http://simone11.wordpress.com/2008/04/27/myth-re-appropriation-into-poem/#comment-67 kflagg Fri, 02 May 2008 21:31:39 +0000 http://simone11.wordpress.com/?p=75#comment-67 I like it! You're right — it falls so effortlessly into the poem that follows. I like it! You’re right — it falls so effortlessly into the poem that follows.

]]> By: simone http://simone11.wordpress.com/2008/04/27/myth-re-appropriation-into-poem/#comment-66 simone Fri, 02 May 2008 05:20:33 +0000 http://simone11.wordpress.com/?p=75#comment-66 Katie - thanks for your comment! What do you think of the title "I Am Sisyphus"? I'm thinking about using that, because it will read well into the first line, I think. Katie – thanks for your comment! What do you think of the title “I Am Sisyphus”? I’m thinking about using that, because it will read well into the first line, I think.

]]> By: kflagg http://simone11.wordpress.com/2008/04/27/myth-re-appropriation-into-poem/#comment-65 kflagg Fri, 02 May 2008 02:55:50 +0000 http://simone11.wordpress.com/?p=75#comment-65 Simone, just a quick comment. I love how the stretched out, broken form of this poem evokes the gravity you mention in the sixth line — there's very much a feeling of suspension (and oddly, for me, of falling) that works beautifully. Also, I love your last lines — "games, merely" is so arresting in particular. I think you might want to revisit the title, though. You want to clue your readers to Sisyphus, but I found "The Myth of Sisyphus" a little too literal. I'd go simpler (maybe just "Sisyphus") or expand your scope a little. Just a thought. Overall, very lovely. :) Simone, just a quick comment. I love how the stretched out, broken form of this poem evokes the gravity you mention in the sixth line — there’s very much a feeling of suspension (and oddly, for me, of falling) that works beautifully. Also, I love your last lines — “games, merely” is so arresting in particular.

I think you might want to revisit the title, though. You want to clue your readers to Sisyphus, but I found “The Myth of Sisyphus” a little too literal. I’d go simpler (maybe just “Sisyphus”) or expand your scope a little. Just a thought. Overall, very lovely. :)

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